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  • Verlyn Klinkenborg: “Several short sentences about writing”

    In the beginning was the word, and the word was a sentence.
    And the sentence was an assignment.
    And the assignment broiled in the brain,
    that alchemical brewpub of doubt.
    A devil came near, cooing, “Plagiarize, my dear;
    allow me to serve the sentence for you.”
    A good angel appeared: “Depart, ye fiends of papers for free.
    Ditch, web dwellers of rehearsed research.
    Begone, you bad teachers of bad writing.
    Students can do this on their own.”
    And singing Blake’s proverb, from
    The Marriage of Heaven and Hell,
    “No bird soars too high if he soars
    with his own wings,” the angel dropped a book
    into the waiting writer’s lap, and flew away.

    What book did this fresh, good angel drop, which might bargain anew all the how-tos with writing students and their teachers both in and out of academia? Verlyn Klinkenborg’s Several short sentences about writing (Vintage, April 2013). Klinkenborg challenges schooled approaches consisting of “received wisdom about how writing works” (Prologue). Klinkenborg turns the traditional writing teacher on his head and shakes the bulges out of his pockets. All sorts of found, useless stuff drops out, lightening the student’s load. Klinkenborg speaks to the writing “piece,” considers genre arbitrary and binding. He eschews genres and schools and rules. But not grammar and syntax. Loves the fragment, not the run-on. His style is controlled by “implication.” Implication is a good sentence’s great secret, its ability to suggest thought. His sentences often illustrate their own attributes. The book as a whole is a study and a reflection on that study of the sentence. The book’s prose is cut into lines that emphasize what’s necessary to read a sentence for its syntax and rhythm and space. Some may see this as mere trickery, and maybe the book is a slow, idiosyncratic, quiet rant. His discussion of “rhetorical tics,” the bane of Freshman Composition that remains through graduate school and beyond like an old scar, is funny and sad (118). If you’ve ever completed any assignments on your own, you might recognize yourself in his descriptions of a web of false writing. I did. But I also saw many hunches I’ve had over time validated: writing is learned while writing and in no other way; a good writer is a good reader, a good proofreader, but also a good general interest reader, which means not having to have something that “interests me” before being able to read it, because good writing creates its own interest; teachers have done so much damage to students that many students would rather risk plagiarism than think and write on their own.

    There are contradictions, difficult to resolve. Klinkenborg says, on page 57, “You don’t need to be an expert in grammar and syntax to write well.” I agree. The apparent contradiction is that he then spends the next sizable section of the book on what we should know about grammar. “You do need to know the difference between transitive and intransitive verbs,” he says, but he doesn’t say why, nor does he try to explain that difference (though the answer might be found in an implication I missed). If we don’t need to know grammar, why spend time on it? This is an important question. And of course we do know grammar. We learned grammar when we learned to speak. But we may not know how to talk about grammar or to read for grammar or syntax. And some knowledge of parts of speech and what we think of as grammatical terms might be important to certain kinds of reading. He wants us to find words in a dictionary and to notice etymology and parts of speech. This is sound. But some of his precepts seem vague, even New-Agey. Explaining implication, he says it’s “The ability to speak to the reader in silence” (13). Well, John Cage did speak to the reader in silence. And Klinkenborg’s many references to the way we were taught to write in school are at risk of becoming a kind of straw man argument. Has no one tried to dig through the dried up crap of fabricated rules before? But the straw man here, if there is one, might be personified as an industry of text books, so the challenge is worth the charge. Klinkenborg may not be an archangel delivering a sacred text, but his book clears the air for a spell.

    A colleague suggested the Klinkenborg book, and I’m glad to have read it and to recommend it for general interest readers, writing teachers at any level, and students at any level, anyone, in short, in or out of school, interested in reading or writing. Yes, Klinkenborg wants to talk to the whole writing world about sentences. He wants to non-specialize the traditional approaches to thinking about writing, remove bogus rules from circulation, instill faith and trust in aspiring readers and writers.

    Several short sentences about writing is divided into four major sections and many subsections. The book (204 pages) does not wear its skeleton on the outside. The main sections are as follows: 1 – a short prologue; 2 – the central text (146 pages), the sentences arranged in cut lines, like verse (opposite of what we’ve come to expect from prose); 3 –  “Some Prose and Some Questions,” eleven short prose excerpts by established writers, followed by a section inviting analysis of the pieces through reflection suggested by specific questions Klinkenborg provides; and 4 – Some Practical Problems, 33 pages of short sentences from student writing, with short comments by Klinkenborg. It’s not a text book, but it could be used as a text. But that would require, perhaps, changing the mindset of an instructor, or even of an entire English department, or at least calling upon instructors to reconsider traditional “received wisdom about how writing works,” or how the teaching and learning of writing might work.

    Here’s an example of a wonderful Klinkenborg sentence fragment: “The faint vertigo caused by an ambiguity you can’t quite detect” (55). This is quoted unfairly out of context (is there any other way to quote?), but who is “you” here? What kind of reading experience must one have to get dizzy reading a poor sentence? And here’s an example of the way he challenges the august teaching community: “…The assumption that logic persuades the reader instead of the clarity of what you’re saying” (117).

    By implication, at least, Klinkenborg’s sentences touch on many of the topics usually covered in composition classes: research, authority, argument, outlining, chronology and sequence, style, ambiguity, rules, rubrics, writing models, imitation, rhythm, revision, editing, meaning, figurative language, transitions, reading, reader, clarity. The sentences wit and cut new paths through this overgrown field.

    If you are into marginalia, this Klinkenborg book is a lepidopterist’s field day. I found myself chasing sentences around the book as if they were butterflies. My copy is a mess of notes. I was inspired to try my hand at an original sentence. Here goes nothing: Thoughts without sentences are like flowers that never bloom, each tightly wrapped petal a word waiting to become part of a sentence to be smelled, to be read or heard in a single breath. Klinkenborg would say it’s too long, ambiguous, cliched, doesn’t breathe. And it doesn’t make sense. Do we hear through breathing? Sounds like something a Woody Allen character might say, the audience erupting in laughter, the irony on you. “The most subversive thing you can do is to write clearly and directly…” (132). Easy for him to say.

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  • The Business of Poetry

    I’m in a meeting about meetings.
    Someone is talking about needs:

    “…Clear purpose…
    …Keep to agenda…
    …Stick to schedule…
    …Out on time…
    …Take notes…
    …Dress code…”

    I note, doodle, jot down words,
    drop seeds of wild silly weeds
    into the creamy hirsute carpet;
    someday the seeds will sprout

    …into poems…

    the night janitor will sweep up.

    The priest talks of the need for prayer in despair.
    The scholar talks of the need to be read by peers.
    The senator talks of the need for dough and polls.
    The bag lady quietly appeals for a change of where.
    The therapist theorizes the need of rest from care.
    The bartender talks of the need for a road to hear.
    The mother yells just wait until your father comes
    home, until the evening comes when Dad disappears.

    Who knows the source of this need from long ago,
    the need for poems and to live like a fat soiled pig
    sloughing off in a muddle puddle wallow of words,
    but the meeting adjourns with predicable promises
    of more to come, of more to come, of more to come,
    and someone breaks an egg over the speaker’s head:
    a detailed SWOT Analysis called for pastry and pie,
    but the speaker is silent, not a word, about poetry.

  • The Art of the Bus Stop

    It was to be his last day, he dreamed, a phantasmagorical dream
    recurred, after a cup of coffee, in wakeful brain, a near belief in seizure.

    How would he spend his last day? He should limit his options,
    if chance proved him a fool tomorrow, build a hedge of porcupines.

    But if today’s feeling did not pass, his options were not so limited.
    He could fly anywhere, stay in a Six Star hotel in bikinied Marseilles,

    fly to romance Rome and get in line for a final Papal blessing,
    parachute into the Mojave desert, jump off Saddleback Mountain,

    surf the Banzai Pipeline – like in the old days, take the board out.
    Who would dare cut off an old man on a wild wave on his last day?

    He got his surfboard out of the deep basement, his lovely wife still sound asleep.
    He walked down to the bus stop. He waited with his surfboard on the poetic bench,

    beneath the ancient acacia tree. The bustling bus came but the discreet driver said no
    to his putting the untethered surfboard in the bike rack on the front of the bus.

    He went back to waiting at the busy bus stop, and this is how he passed
    his penultimate yesterday, talking to bussers about the art of surfing.

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  • Poetry Footprint

    Poetry High FiveAccording to the Global Footprint Network, the Ecological Footprint is “the metric that allows us to calculate human pressure on the planet and come up with facts, such as: If everyone lived the lifestyle of the average American we would need 5 planets.” There are several footprints currently being measured, carbon and water, for example, and we are encouraged to measure our own personal footprint and to reduce the size of our footprint, “to tread more lightly on the earth.”

    Maybe poetry does not have a footprint, but a handprint. A print that shows who was here, and this is what they saw, what they heard, what they tasted, what they touched and felt, what they smelled. But also, what they and those close to them thought about this sensorium of experience, how they responded, how they changed, what they promised and what they betrayed, how they might have wronged and how they might have been forgiven. To do all of that, poetry needs a wide spectrum of possibilities. Some of these possibilities might lead listeners, readers, away from well worn paths, into uncharted waters, rough seas, or lulls, or blank spaces with no echo. Other possibilities might lead readers back into cities with crowded sidewalks, or into libraries full of musty, dusty books. Or into parks, or taverns, or beaches, or mountains and lakes and rivers, or nurseries or old folks’ homes, or orphanages or prisons, or churches or corporations, or onto ships or bicycles or cars or helicopters or surfboards. The point here is that any of these possibilities, for any individual listener, might wind up a dead end, but it can’t be wrong if it widens the spectrum, for the wider the spectrum, the greater the possibility of poetry.

    I sometimes wonder if human nature improves over time. In other words, are we better than our ancestors? We might like to think so. Technology and medicine, the comforts of modern housing and transportation, what we call advancements and improvements resulting in higher standards of living might lead us to think we are smarter, more accomplished, in a word, better than our ancestors. But what of our essential nature? Has that improved? Does it improve? Can it improve? I have doubts. I think we’re probably the same inside as we’ve always been. It’s the same old heart beating in the same old chest.

    In any case, what inspires this post is another skirmish posted in the poetry war, an internecine, academic argument. I’ll just point to David Biespiel’s response over at the Rumpus, and interested readers can follow the trail-links from there. Like most wars, it’s sometimes hard for an outsider to get what it’s all about, but like most fights, this one’s about territory and who’s to have the final word. But it’s also about values, what we value in poetry, and whose values ought to prevail. It might be important to remember that what we value is not necessarily what’s good for us. What we value is simply what we want.

    There is something about poetry to value, to want, that is relevant to the discussion. One of my favorite books of poems is “Paroles,” by Jacques Prevert.* Prevert lived in Paris during World War II, during the German occupation. Writing in 1964, Lawrence Ferlinghetti, in his translator’s note introduction, said, “I first came upon the poetry of Jacques Prevert written on a paper tablecloth in St. Brieuc in 1944…a poetry (his worst critics will tell you) which is perfectly suited to paper tablecloths, and existing always on as fine a line between sentiment and sentimentality as any that Charlie Chaplin ever teetered on.” That “perfectly suited to” is important, for it values a poem for its success in achieving its purpose. Even if we might think the purpose is bad, it can still be a good poem. This is a sentiment many critics find difficult to stomach, but it’s vital to the health of a wide spectrum of poetic possibilities.

    But there’s another reason I like Prevert, and that has to do with the idea of sitting out at a sidewalk cafe table writing a poem on a paper napkin, not even a paper tablecloth, a poem someone might read, or no one might read. Poetry was a way out of oppression for Prevert, and poetry remains a tool today for release from the natural malaise that comes from everyday life, even if that release is only temporary, and even if that malaise is from human pressure. The release comes in the act of writing the poem, not from the possibilities of someone else reading it or of having it published or some fantasy of poetic fame, but from the existential act that says, I am here, and this is what that means, for now. The act of poetry leaves a tiny Ecological Footprint. That sidewalk cafe napkin poem might be a good way to “tread more lightly on the earth,” even as it adds to the size of the poetry footprint.

    *Jacques Prevert’s “Paroles” is Number 9 in “The Pocket Poets Series,” first published in the City Lights Books edition in July 1958, in San Francisco. I have the Sixth Printing, February 1968.

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  • Dictatorial Decree

    Already the sun slipsSun,
    filches off
    at a sneaking speed.

    The despot rising
    declares a natural
    state of emergency.

    The pompous papa
    prays on the instant
    for a sum of leniency.

    Alas, mere poet, see?
    The sun protracts
    your high-pitched misery.

    Tonight a summer
    full moon calls
    a ball of lunacy.

    The sun dictates the noon,
    casts down dress codes
    on the darling horology.

    The moon denudes the day.
    The night goes without
    a blanket of authority.

  • A Pith Zany

    Nook EveningAnd what he did last just
    before his personal power
    rose and surged
    then tweeted out
    was check his e-mail.

    “Heaven will be full of spam,”
    he decried, “because
    everyone wants to be there,
    while hell will be whiteout,
    an empty inbox.”

    “Or the other way around,”
    I replied.
    “Oh, that’s pithy,” he said.
    “And there’s nothing I dislike
    more than an epiphany poem.”

  • facephenom

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    facebrick facebuilt facebroke faceblind facedearth
    faceboss facetomb facepop facedough facetious
    facestitch facetouch facebotch facebach faceberth
    facestill facestone facequiet facepiece facemirth
    facebush faceface facephone facespill facer
    facecross facetoss facemoss facetaste facemill
    facevalve faceback facade faceplay faceout
    facetone facemoan faceme faceyou facepull
    faceposh facerush facemush facebrush facetilt
    facsimile factotum facecap facemask facetome
    facedrone facetill facetree faceroad facelift
    facesky facefront faceit facebuck faceroam
    facethis faucet facet facetrick faceroom
    faceless facemuse faceup facestop faceboom
  • Without you tonight

    A seeking breeze softly slips
    under the sleeping cherry tree
    a cursory note, “I am too busy.
    Too, too, toodle-loo,”
    smiles, hushes, and sounds off.
    A branch snaps, and a cat recalls the night
    when the owl, the nightingale,
    and the toad went out walking.

    The moon follows the trio into the tea garden, pulling
    behind the sounds of the rollicking ocean waves.
    In the garden, two women sit talking:

               “I wrench or hammer or pull or push
               To disassemble and repair
               To build in empty air
               The sound truth that is not
               Sound enough.”
     
               “I don’t believe the truth
               That there is no truth
               There are two truths
               The one you reject
               And the one you embrace.”

    Drowned out by the singing waves slopped with frothing beer,
    An old, lost surfer takes a hearty long piss on the briny rocks
    At the water’s rough edge and mutters a half assed poem
    To pass the night in song outside walking the dark beach
    While the women sit talking with the cat in the cove of the garden
    Under the cherry tree awakening and petals falling all
    In one great breath the ocean waves belly laughing full.

    Surfers

  • Salad Days

    Lettuce make someone happy      souperfied.         Greens and reds     raised and cooked      in summer sun.         Old gourd melon face      turn round      and around.         Squash      straighten out      cute little zucchinis.         Carrot tops      fuzzy green      pointing      poking.         Turnip cold heart      don’t be rutabaga.         Radish reaction      thistle never do.         Wilt    silly    salty    pinch    potato eyes.         Watching.     Asparagus more of this stuff.         Spears      dollups     thin slices of pink water.         Peas take your jackets off and stay awhile.         Ouch cucumber splinter onion oils mix.         Tear drops      sea salt      keeping with tradition.         Corn      fits in hand      like a hammer handle.         Colorful beans      leggy for you and me.         Chives purple heads and slippery mushrooms.        Tomato baseball radio garlic.         Bread      olive oil      hot  green  jalapeno.         Pepper corn      and squeeze curve of lemony         raspberry wild balsamic vinegar.         Tossen flip      thistle make summerone happy.

  • The Pine Jay the Scree of the Mock Orange

    Still LifeThe cryptic cat her cautious criticism
    of the green salsa garden plot proffers:

    “Are you a nested poet, then?”
    the hoity-toity cat simply asks.

    “I have my cri cri critics,”
    the Pine Jay stutters,

    pouring herself another glass
    of mock orange soda syrah.

    “Are you going to mix
    silver with orange, then?” asks the cat.

    “I would rather arrange the orange
    against this blue windswept evening.”

    “That would encourage a paraorange
    gown,” cynically suggests the cat.

    “Scr scr scree!” the Pine Jay screes,
    her voice trailing off like a jet’s vapor.

    “Mock, mock!” the cat converses,
    though alone now. “I never did like orange peel.”

  • “Bury My Heart in the Muddy Mississippi”

    Dancers with Band The Touch Yous

    “Bury My Heart in the Muddy Mississippi”
    A Country Music song
    Guitar Chords: GAD

    (Slow intro with a little lilt)
    G                             A
    I took my girl to the Friday night dance,
    D                                 G
    But she said, “I really don’t like to dance.”

    (Lively now)
    (G) Then some handsome fella
    with the (A) swagger of Godzilla,
    (D) asked her do you wanna (G) dance,
    (G) and the next thing I knew
    (A) away they flew.
    (D) He’s got her in a (G) trance.

    Chorus
    G                          A
    Hey, Baby, don’t drive me crazy,
    D                                                      G
    I thought you said you didn’t like to dance.
    G                                        A
    Well, bury my heart in the muddy Mississippi,
    D                                                      G
    I thought she said she didn’t like to dance.

    So I walked on down and I put my money down
    On the counter of the mausoleum,
    And I asked the mortician how much it cost to die
    But he said I was a buck too short.

    Repeat Chorus

    Late one night I was stopped at a light,
    Revvin’ up my hot rod Ford.
    Along comes a Chevy, at the wheel’s my Baby,
    Askin’ do I wanna dance.
    I took her off the line, pink slips on a dime,
    And the rest I’m happy to tell.
    The moral of this story,
    The letter of this tale (D – G…)

    Repeat Chorus